On my way home from office, I picked up a free local bulletin.
that was written in English, It musｔ be for foreign people whose living in the area,one of the articles was written about a good place for viewing cherry bloosoms.when I read it I realized, it`s already the cherry blossoms season. I felt the time went by so much faster than ever. would it go even faster next year???
here is my favorite place to take a walk and also good location to viewing cherry blossoms!
http://meguroku-net.com/meguro/sakura/p1-megurogawa.htm
仕事の帰り道にあった、英語で書かれた地域情報誌にお花見情報が載ってました！！もう？？なんて一年早いのだろう。驚くばかりです。この分だと来年はもっと早く来ちゃうかな～ おお怖。。。
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On my way home from THE office, I picked up a free local bulletin that was written in English. It must be for foreign people who live in the area. One of the articles was written about a good place for viewing cherry blossoms. When I read it, I realized it`s already the cherry blossoms season. I felt that time went by so much faster than ever. Would it go even faster next year???
Here is my favorite place to take a walk and also A good location FOR viewing cherry blossoms!
I enjoy reading your little texts every time! Always very interesting.
Once again, some minor spelling mistakes, a few "the" and "a" mistakes, and a bit of prepositions (of, for, etc.), but it's ok. No problem.
What is NOT ok are the PUNCTUATIONS. Please look over them again, and again, and again, and again, and again. And if you have to, again, and again, and again. I cannot say it enough. If you have ONE thing to focus on right now for your English studies, it should be PUNCTUATIONS. All other problems can wait.
The major mistakes for this text are:
1a) There should not be a "." after "bulletin".
1b) If there was a "." after bulletin, as you wrote, then your "that" should start with a capital "T".
2a)There IS a "." after "English", not a ",".
2b)If there was a "," like you wrote, then the "It" should have a small "i".
3) You sentence ended after "area", therefore you should put a "." and start the next sentence with "One" with the capital "O".
4) After "ever", there is a "." like you wrote. That's ok. But "would" takes a capital "W".
5) Of course, the next paragraph should start with a capital "H" for "here".
Finally, just a little thing. I wouldn't say "faster than ever". It sounds weird to me. I would say "faster than last year" or some other SPECIFIC time.
Anyways, it's not very important. Like I said, your focus should be PUNCTUATIONS, PUNCTUATIONS, PUNCTUATIONS, PUNCTUATIONS, PUNCTUATIONS!!!! If you understand your punctuations better, your text will immediately be 10 times better.
You can do it! Ganbarimasho!
v(^o^)//
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